Catw practice 3
The child is going to know his position in the family, depending in the order of birth is stated in “How your birth order influences your life adjustment” by Lucille Forer. Parents would think the oldest child will be able to get information faster than the youngest one. The middle child usually he will be learning about how to do things than other people coping from his older sibling. The youngest child should not do what others do but he has somebody to help and to take care of him. The only child has to learn and be on his own when parents are not there. I agree with the author’s statement that “The only child tends to think, when my parents are not around, I have no one to turn to for help. So I’d better learn to take care of myself”
As the older child, parents may think that this one is going to be the head of the children. I like to see a TV show named “ Good luck Charlie” on Disney channel where the older child uses to make videos of how life is and make the youngest one watch and learn of them. She is always recording what is happening in her life and give advises to make the youngest one “Charlie” live life less difficult. Teddy, the older one, just ask for help to their parents when she need it because she knows that she knows more about life than her brothers and when parents are not there she is on her own.
The only child have to learn for his own point of life, there isn’t anything to copy of. When babies cry they are sure that somebody is going to pick them up. My sister who is now in the earth, she died when she was two month and a half, she used to cry a lot and she did not shut up until my mother or me pick her up. On day, my mother realized that when she left my sister when my sister was crying, after minutes my sister shut up by herself. I think she knew and thought that if there was nobody to pick her up; she should take care of herself.
As I grew up, I think I learned of my own error with help of my parents only, I have one sister, the oldest one, and a brother, the youngest one. My sister since she born she cannot talk, walk, sit, she is just lying in her bed, crying when she is hungry or something is bothering her. My brother is 5 years old and he does not live with me, I do not count him. I did not have somebody to fight, to talk as my sibling, just my parents. My ways of thinking, my attitudes and my personalities I got them on my own or on what my parents used to teach me. Also I did not have a personal shape of following, it was just me.
In conclusion, the birth order influe in your life and on how you are going to be identify in your family. Depending on people birth order, their expectation on life and how they are going to develop it.
i believe you do give a type of summary is to what the article was mainly about. in your first paragraph, you did paraphrase and used main details of the article.i do see that your essay does have a thesis. but as i read, the qoute you agreed with “The only child tends to think, when my parents are not around, I have no one to turn to for help. So I’d better learn to take care of myself”, i dont really recalled it saying "i have no one to turn too". you shouldnt paraphrase a quote given. for your downshifting, i truly believe your sentences could up to a 4 but as for what i see they are a 2. you dont really put a time or a place of when the situation occur. yes state what happened, but not a specific time in your life. one of your example paragraph, it didnt really go with the quote you agreed to. you have an intro, 2-3 paragraphs and a conclusion. i just would have really put thought in your example paragraph. some evidence was shown in the beginning of your intro.
ResponderEliminarI think the summary paragraph does a great job on offering the main points in the article. There minor spelling mistakes. The essay has a thesis of “The only child tends to think, when my parents are not around, I have no one to turn to for help. So I’d better learn to take care of myself.
ResponderEliminarThe downshifting levels are 2 & 4 because of the only child have to learn for his own point of life, there isn’t anything to copy of and Level 4 because of the 2nd paragraph when you include your own personal experience. The structure is essay is good as well; you included all of the bodies needed in a essay.
Now the only issue is that besides the last 2 personal experience paragraph which talks about the “only child characteristics” The thesis was not supported enough, the personal experience was used in 2 paragraphs and the only child thesis was not supported by the Good Luck Charlie example. Charlie has older siblings and is being guided by her older sister. The only child has no one but his/her parents.